I cut out part of the reason this is my favorite. This is one of the first scenes I wrote after taking a writing class to help build my description abilities--although, for the sake of space, I didn't include the intro. The second reason it is my favorite is because it is where she decides to go against all training, to abandon what has been drilled into her in order to do the right thing:
After a moment, Jocasta asked, “Do you ever question our duty?”
"In the Imperial Guard?”
Jocasta nodded.
Brasidas hesitated, looked around him, then said, “At times, but it is not my place.”
Jocasta nodded. “That’s what I used to say, too.”
“And now?”
Jocasta shrugged. “And now Alcaeus is dead.”
“He told me once that it was a citizen’s duty to question.”
“But we’re not citizens.”
The only sound in the room was new water rushing from the pipes to refresh the bath.

Jocasta didn’t like to look at her president through that kind of looking glass. She had lived in that distortion of a reality for the majority of her life. But something didn’t seem to fit anymore. Alcaeus’ death brought on too many unanswered questions. Why was he killed? Whose idea was it to lie and why did they lie? What did he want to tell her upon her return? He had said he wished to tell her something. Was it what she had suspected? Why would a man dedicated to serving his country suddenly find himself on the opposite side? But more disturbing to Jocasta was the final question. Would she join him?
Finally, Brasidas broke the silence. “No,” his voice echoing off the tile, “we are not citizens. We are Zeus.”
Their eyes locked for a moment. Jocasta nodded. “Yes, we are.”
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